Jansport Legend

Jansport Legend
Rate my lyrics to my first rap song?

From the western lands of the East with cold clean as the Tour with folding khakis smoking pipes peace Homie load line with the strength of this Maxima is the horse, which rides on CD until the sky is the arsenal, Mic sword is the weapon of the Ancients flowing with a vengeance felling the enemy countless millions on me and my motley crew of criminals Journey through the Holy Land clearing convert the infidels Leaving no meaning or die choice of Salvation, it sounds through my voice We have traveled afar and Lore variety of legends standing me time tests Jansport and my tracks to my side Uniting lyrical genius underground MC's in flight thunderous Provider rhymes, Soldier of Jah, committer of crimes taking King, with the Giving freedom cry with fear in their eyes Immortal Crusade last charge of the Light Brigade Glorioso Escapade renegade city-state of Babylon

Good flow, good to see some people really know how to work the syllables. Keep writing, it's so fun and you will get better.